Monthly Archives: February 2010

A friendship revised: Personal Narrative

You may remember, I had to write a personal narrative for my writing class. I received a B on that original assignment. Part two of that assignment was; after a one on one with my teacher, we were to revise it based on her guidelines. Her comments were based that I have too many “lovely verbose lists”. She was afraid I would tire my reader, and after my revision, I could gain some of those points back. As you could imagine i’m less than thrilled about this. But, I do what I can to get the right grades. Her suggestion. Cut 4 pages from the original. If you followed me on twitter,you’d know that I was SUPER angry. Well, I feel that I have destroyed the story, and it no longer feels like my “voice” except the last paragraph. I almost made the 4 pages. (I only could, in good conscious, cut so much. So here’s the revision.

Here’s hoping it’s what she wants. I’ve already written the story I wanted.

The road may be bumpy by the trip is worth it (PDF Link)


Balance, It’s Delicate

The last few weeks have been difficult and stressful for me. Not because I dislike things, but because I like too much.

Even Balance Can be Slippery**

I like my job, in fact, I really love my job. But, it has been really busy. We’ve got a lot going on. I like being busy.

I like that I’m going back to school. I’m spending a lot of time doing homework and spending a lot of time in class.

I like my friends. This is one place where I could use a little more effort. Why? Because I no longer have the time I used to in order to connect with them. Everything feels rushed, or that I have time to spend with one instead of another. We all make choices.

I’ve got an incredibly packed schedule. I haven’t found the right balance yet in order to really enjoy my time. I’m not overwhelmed, but I’m certainly feeling the burden. I’ve had a lot of venting lately. I’ve certainly had some serious frustration. I’m working through it. I might take a little bit more on next term, but I’m pretty certain I can handle it.

To all those things in my life; my friends, my family, my personal and professional lives, You know I’m making my life better. You’re making my life better. We shall all be enriched in the long run. We just take on the difficult to know what we are capable of.

Thanks for reading/listening.

Fortunate indeed, is the man who takes exactly the right measure of himself, and holds a just balance between what he can acquire and what he can use.Peter Mere Latham*

*Quote provided by my favorite quote source –

**Photo by Annais, used under Creative Commons licensing

More Writing (Down with homework)

My latest assignment for my Writing class was to write a nonsensical five-paragraph essay. It’s to illustrate our confidence in the structure of an essay and that we are able to create and write properly. Here’s what I chose, I hope my teacher has a good sense of humor.

Writing Homework is Hazardous to Students

Since the dawn of time humans have used many forms to communicate with others. The earliest humans used grunts and brute force to impress their point upon another. Since the invention of the “Written word”; students have been tortured to memorize word structure, formatting and proper choice of words. Until recently, the perception that constant structured repetitious use of essays, story writing and word usage tests caused students to further communicate with others. This contradictory report claims Writing and writing homework is bad for students because; Writing causes neurological paranoia in students, Writing causes repetitive stress injuries to the hands and wrists, and finally; Writing homework is the number one cause of social life deficiency in students. Students’ lives would be much easier if writing homework wasn’t a part of the school experience.

Looking over your shoulder and being stricken with panic are not the only recognized forms of paranoia. Students who take writing classes are often paralyzed with fear of being judged. Dr. Willis, of the Western Writing Collective Institute completed a study[1] in July of 2008, where he studied the assignments of a hundred college students. He found that ninety-nine percent of students are tormented with the pressure of writing papers and concern from being judged by their peers. The pressure causes students to write with trepidation and often causes assignments to be half thoughts or incomplete arguments.

The National Association of Emergency Room Nurses recently came out in support of tougher restrictions on the frequency and size of writing assignments.[2] In 2007, it was reported the number of writing/typing injuries increased nationally during the fall and spring. While the number of injuries declined during the summer months, coinciding with the traditional times associated with summer break. This research seemingly supports the claims of many school children that homework causes frequent and repetitive stress injuries to the hands and wrists, furthering the claim that writing homework is a “pain in the neck”.

Social lives are important to the development of all people. The pursuit of friendships, relationships and endeavors for the betterment of individuals create successful individuals. Whether it’s: exploring your cities’ attractions, traveling to places you’ve never been, socializing with friends, dating or just spending time in your own environment, these things are all important and consistently diminished by the necessity to complete writing assignments and homework.

This student, in researching the effects of writing homework on the average student has come to the conclusion that writing homework is unnecessary and should be abolished from the curriculum.  Subjecting students to the constant barrage of deadlines and peer pressure can have irreversible effects in the long term. In the immediate, a stressed student can be affected so much by an assignment that they feel defeat and deflation. Abolish homework now.

[1] Willis, William. “Students Damaged By Writing Pressure”. Writing Studies. Kalamazoo: Crazed Monkey, 2009

[2] Markenson, Mark. “Homework Reduction Helps Students”. National Association of Emergency Room Nurses Monthly January 1, 2010: 14-16.

Lenore’s Lust – A Poem

The frost sets upon this night,
the suns glare scorches the barren land,
a cold snap rattles the bones,
an inner fire, a glowing soul,
This being,
Her insight astounds,
The Dementia surrounds,
This insanity spreads like wildfire.
It, is then, at this very moment,
Through the dark, gray ominous clouds,
you see the star,
Shining where one should not.
That is how,
How you know,
you’ve found the comfort,
of a long cherished friend.

A personal narrative

So here it is. My long awaited paper for a personal narrative.

As you read, I’m supposed to consider these questions. I have an idea on one of them, but I would hope you could help me out.

What do you think the meaningful point or purpose of your narrative is?

Who is your intended audience for your narrative? (and by that she means what type of magazine might I submit it to?)

Personal Narrative Rough Draft